Old Gus, boatman of the words, wisdom of the water
gathered with his class to workshop poems
Gus told the cautious lawyer
your crafty verse compels but fails
for want of color, passion, music — Let the river roar
before you set off in your raft
To the woman young in love
I like the bright song of your sketch, gold and green of spring
but ‘til gray of winter works into your brush
— Open to the darkness coming in
Gus stopped a stooping boy
last to leave
who handed Gus a note of suicide
framed in black with scratchy pen
Gus read the note, then said
The lines are good but much too short
Readers, I am sure, will want to know
just why the poet chose
to not go on, especially
the more despondent ones
Go deeper in the black
don’t leave it round the edge
though I like the cascade chronicle of defeat that you put down
perhaps it is the comic touch
that moves me so
Gus caught his eye, asked the boy
to rework the piece, come to class again
lightly touching the boy’s arm
— take your time
— let it all evolve
— you have a poet’s voice, a poem well on its way